講真，你寫的文章，觀點有點太多了

最新 07-17

如果你從去年就開始閱讀我的文章，

那麼你一定知道金字塔結構對於一篇作文，尤其是academic essay的重要性。

可我依然每天可以看到大量的同學，仍舊不會組織自己的觀點，

不會組織段落里的句子，更加無法搭建文章整體結構。

對此我表示十分著急。要知道，以上所有問題對於任何一篇作文都是致命的。

無論你怎麼訓練語法，背誦單詞，甚至死記硬背別人的觀點，

只要你不解決文章的邏輯、和文章結構的問題，

那麼只要題目一變，你下次很大概率同樣過不了。

今天，我就想和大家分享一個常見的問題：雅思大作文觀點到底要有幾個。

許多同學，始終在糾結這個問題。

他們最典型的表現是，遇到會的題目，一個觀點可以討論好久。

一旦遇到不會的題目，就開始東拼西湊的寫文章。

我很負責任的告訴大家，每篇文章的idea不需要很多！

如果能講的明白，每段1-2個就足夠了！

一些高分作文甚至會出現一段一個idea！

也許，你會好奇為什麼寫的少，反而會的高分呢？

因為雅思寫作不是智力測驗，而是英語表達能力考試。

這一點和口語考試十分類似，唯一不同的是寫作要求書面文章。

不少同學會犯同樣一個錯，面對考題，在brainstroming的時候，

拚命想觀點和理由，奢望靠數量來斬獲高分。

老外把這種錯誤稱之為：shotgun approach。

意思是一槍打出太多子彈，可惜都沒命中目標。

這樣的題目，你會如何構思段落觀點呢？

下面就以這道題，給大家做一個分析。

Question:

In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation.What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

通常我們會這麼思考。

先把advantages部分的idea全部列出來，然後再列出所有disadvantages的idea。

Advantages

1. decrease cars using

2. reduce air pollution

3. use more public transportation

4.less greenhouse gas

5.lead to a drop in the number of accidents

Disadvantages:

1. family pay more than before

2.lead to the spreading of infections

3.automobile companies would reduce their employment number

4. unfair to poor people

上面的想法我敢保證，99.99%的同學都能想得出來。

但假如你在寫作時，在主體段中，把advantages和disadvantages全數列入，

那這篇文章一定不會得高分。考官會覺得：嗯，能想出這麼多idea不容易。

可惜了，都沒說明白為什麼。所以...sorry...5分！

合適的idea，如何有效放入主體段落里呢？

以前，教大家的公式，你們還記得嗎？

T+S+E+A+SO+R=high score

在你寫每一篇大作文時，都要牢牢記住它，用會它，掌握它。

給大家看兩段關於這一題的高分段落。看完後給各位布置一個小任務，你得仔細看哦。

One of the first benefits of such a measure is that the heavy taxes would discourage car owners from using their cars because it would become very expensive to drive. This would mean that they would begin to make use of public transport instead, thus reducing traffic problems and pollution as well. Another benefit would be that much more use would be made of public transport if it was improved. It is often the case that public transport in cities is very poor. For example, we often see old buses and trains that people would rather not use. High taxes would generate enough money to make the necessary changes.

Nevertheless, there are drawbacks to such a solution. First and foremost, this would be a heavy burden on the car drivers. At present, taxes are already high for a lot of people, and so further taxes would only mean less money at the end of the month for most people who may have no choice but to drive every day. In addition, this type of tax would likely be set at a fixed amount. This would mean that it would hit those with less money harder, whilst the rich could likely afford it. It is therefore not a fair tax.

給大家布置的任務是：

1. 重溫寫作公式

2. 在範例中找出公式里對應的內容

3. 把你找到的部分列在留言區

4. 你能找到多少算多少

趕緊動手找一找吧。這樣的訓練，我知道你在家很難有動力完成，

那就在看完這篇文章後，動動手指找找看！花5分鐘，收穫一次小小的成長。

小活動：曬書桌活動投票

前兩天，大熱天的想讓大家曬一下自己學習的環境。

原本以為，可能沒多少同學參加。

可沒想，居然有9位同學發來了自己的學習環境。

如果沒記錯的話，大部分是女生。